Just to set up the scene for you: my main character, Cleo, has gone to visit her great-grandmother (Ma Murr), a former slave, who lives a bit farther out in the country.
From TRAIN WATCH:
Ma Murr said, "Do it, chile! Run for your life!" She got a faraway look in her eyes. "Yes, yes." She nodded. "Just like I ran for mine. Mmm. hmm. You want to be free. Lum and Jenny ain't free 'cause they still working for Boss Man. But you, chile, you has a chance to be free. Grab it!"
She twisted around, causing Cleo to abruptly stop combing her silvery, waist-length hair. "You hearin' me, chile?"
Cleo blinked. "Y-Y-Yes, Ma'am." Ma Murr always gave her the willies with that piercing stare.
Ma Murr smiled, content with her preaching. "Good. Good. Go on home, now. We's finished for today."
Thanks for reading!
7 comments:
Oops, I goofed the first time.
Crystal! This is sooo good. Stop "teasing" and give us more!
Love it! Love that word 'Chilie'. I can hear her sayin it :)
Crystal,
I think you have found your niche. This genre seems much better suited to you than PBs! Can't wait to read more!
Thanks so much everyone for stopping by and reading this brief excerpt . . .
Deb--Glad you like it . . . I'll do more soon once I finish getting this scene down . . .
Tabitha--Thanks! Glad you can picture the character so well . . .
Corey--Yes, I think this is definitely my niche but I still love the challenge of a PB! Go figure!
Thanks again y'all for reading . . . can you believe this scene is so new that I only have it written in long hand? But it's definitely going into a chapter that I'm revising. :)
Crystal I loved it. Intense and very visual for me.
Thanks for allowing us a peek!
Blessings to you...
Thanks for stopping by, Tamika! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
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